"After the Fall": Alternate fate short story by Fyloket

A short vignette I wrote. I wanted to create a story that captivates not a war itself, but what follows instead and specifically how it impacts commoners. Feedback is appreciated!


A very definite end to gythia sounds harsh.
I like the part about the neutrality of the stormqueen. Deeming her evil might not be justifiable when she does what is needed to stop the churn.

this gave me shivers. It is meant to be Lance, isn’t it?

It wasn’t intended to sound like Lance, it was meant to be the descendant of a Gythian insurgent who adopted a quiet life. There was only so much I could do with just 300 words, but otherwise I think I got across all that I meant to.

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